Tuesday, September 6, 2016

Adding details

I am learning to add some detail to my writing.

Lucky the Whale

One day in the blue sea there was a whale called Lucky. She had ten friends. Her best friend was called Emily. They were very best friends. When Lucky was a baby Emily was a baby too. Lucky and Emily had the same birthday. Lucky and Emily’s birthday was on the 2nd August. When it was the 2nd August Lucy and Emily were happy. Then Lucky’s friend came.

 I always add lots of detail to my story. Sometimes I need to look at my plan to help me remember all of them.

1 comment:

Anonymous said...

I love reading your very detailed stories.